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提问:GY俊俊
级别:七年级
来自:中国

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已解决的问题 求修改作文~感激!!!
What do you think of money?

Money is the most important thing in human being. As is well known, money is not everything, but it is terrible absolutely for us not to have money.
You can say that money can not buy everything you want, but whatever how you say and how to do, money is still in the center of our lives.
How much money which people have is a rich man? The same amount of money to different people have different answers. The different treatments to money doesn’t depend on the difference of people’s real wealth, but the mind of people how to deal with money.
In a word, we can not overly concerned about gains and losses of money, or you will lose more things than you have.
 提问时间:2008-08-03 22:52:06    评论举报
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回答:★夏日清风★
级别:八年级

2008-08-04 11:14:14
来自:河南省
1.human being改为human beings,因为human being强调“个人”,human being强调“人群,人们human强调“人群”.

2.As is well known用法正确不应该修改

3.it is terrible absolutely for us not to have money改为:
it is absolutely terrible for us if we dont have money.

4.but whatever how you say and how to do改为:
no matter what you say and what you do

5.lives改为life做"生活"讲时是不可数名词

6.How much money which people have is a rich man?改为:
How much money should you have if you want to be a rich man ?

7.The different treatments to money 改为The different opinions on money 表示观点,看法时最好用opinion,而不用treatments一般表示对待某事物(某人),招待,款待的意思.

8.the mind of people how to deal with money.改为:
the method of dealing with money.

我感觉这篇文章总体还行,但应注意个别词的用法.另外最后一段写的比较成功,第3段用not....but的结构很不错!这是我自己的看法,希望对你能有所帮助!!
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十分感谢您给我的回答,我获益匪浅啊!!! 同样感谢“朝天飞飞”老师,没办法只能采纳一个答案,学生我衷心感激感激!!!
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回答:朝天飞飞
级别:硕士

2008-08-03 23:19:49
来自:河南省
To human being,money is very important.As well known, money is not everything, but it is terrible that we not have money.
You can say that money can not buy everything you want, but whatever what you say and what you do, money is still in the center of our lives.
How much money that people have being a rich man? The same amount of money to different people have different answers. The different treatments to money doesn’t depend on the difference of people’s real wealth, but the mind that people how to deal with money.
In a word, we cant overly concerned about gain or loss money, or you will lose more things than you have.
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